I am the prisoner sleeping in the belly of your soul
Lost in the ocean of one Iris
Dialated and unsure of the coming storms
Call me Shameful as I laugh
In your noose
I don't mind the intrusion
How metal rusts roses
How you tend to ignore these conversations.
I wear my umbrella even when it's dry outside.
Only you understand why.
Can you get me back to Alice?
Where everything is clear.
Where door knobs lead you into directions
directly
Im falling down the hole
And Im waiting
To see Beyond the bottom
The opening line is a great hook!
ReplyDeleteI've always loved the Alice stories and was excited to read your poem. There were some very intriguing and beautiful phrases here.
ReplyDelete"Ocean of one Iris dilated"
"How metal rusts roses"
are my two favorurite! Thanks for sharing.
Love Alice, and love your take on her story... love your imagery.
ReplyDeleteSuperb word choices, imagery, line breaks.
ReplyDeletewow. wonderful imagery...i agree the opening hook is amazing...and a great telling...one shot!
ReplyDeleteThank you !
ReplyDelete...I am the prisoner sleeping in the belly of your soul...just wow!!
ReplyDeleteAn absurdist One Shot - love it, Steven!
ReplyDelete"Lost in the ocean of one Iris
ReplyDeleteDilated and unsure of the coming storms"
definitely a great image that builds you up ready for the crash. like how you flipped it into Alice's world where life just isn't any clearer, except for you. cool
Great imagery... and you take the reader with you in your thoughts...with words like..."I wear my umbrella even when it's dry outside.
ReplyDeleteOnly you understand why."
Perfect...
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An interesting Piece..loved reading it
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