She’s just a tornado with skinned knees
And a pink dress
She has some sort of ship
And a direct line to God
Lines static
She can tell a good story
But the commander is tired and the rain sometimes , it sometimes never stops falling.
She will tell you about the boys and how they are cowards with swords
And maybe just maybe she’ll tell you that the ocean is a grave yard full of their bones..
There’s a girl with those unusual lips and dark brown eyes, and they all say she is beautiful
But she won’t believe you , because those boys.. those boys..
She has a sailor she calls home,
She has grace to keep her calm,
And she fights, yes.
But if there was a lesson to be learned
It’s in the stories she writes
But we are soldiers hand made by Kings
Is there anyone listening… the line is static…
wonderful description of her...the opening lines say much and you explain it even further as you go...is anyone listening, of course...smiles.
ReplyDeleteHer imagination didn't fall out of the sky. She has a direct line to God and you. Beautifully written. She stood in full uniform before me. Lovely. Gay @beachanny
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful, manifesting a ton of talent..xxxJenne'
ReplyDeleteDear Amy
ReplyDeleteWith your starting lines ...
'She’s just a tornado with skinned knees
And a pink dress'
you got me hooked... and then the story unfolded like beautiful tapestry... and the ending brought me back to static... beautiful up and down.. thanks for sharing...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/02/whispers-another-kind-of-valentines-day.html
This has such a cool syncopated rhythm to it, and I'm totally in love with that girl. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteLove this one. Love the girl. I can see Tori Amos singing this...
ReplyDeleteThanks.. ;)
ReplyDeletegreat one...
ReplyDeletelove the sentiments here.
smiles.
you rock.